Lost In Translation by Sophia Coppola (a few lessons)

Note: the outline is on here somewhere too. Just found these tidbits on my old laptop and wanted to put them somewhere they wouldn't die or be forgotten. Next page...

 
JOHN
(doesn’t really want her to)
Ok.
 
Funny joke: “Who do I have to fuck to get off this planet?” Says Bob.
 
Note: Things that happen are plot, because they are progressing the relationship.
 
Note: It could be good to have our lead girl’s BF go out of town for a little. To have her maybe feel a little neglected and alone like this.
 
It’s interesting the way she uses ellipses in action writing:
 
Hiromix dances… Charlotte dances with Hans – she looks sweaty but beautiful… Bob dancees with his eyes closed, really into it, in the midst of all of the… the song “I Feel Too Young” plays.
 
ACTION LINE: She opens her eyes to smile at him. He wants to kiss her, but he leaves.
 
CLOSE UPS imply intimacy when it’s unspoken. Really interesting way to underscore the subtext. “Do you want to have some breakfast?” C.U. her hand waraps the phone cord around her fingers. “Yeah… I’ll meet you downstairs.”
 
LOOK BACK AT THOSE CLOSE UPS: PAGE 45.
 
CUT TO: is used instead of LATER as a slug. Gives an interesting feeling to the passage of time.
 
Kelly stands facing them with a karaoke mic singing “WHATEVER” with all her heart. Bob and Charlotte look at each other and keep walking (trying to be invisible).
 
-Every scene just needs to communicate something new about the progression of their relationship. Once it does that, we’re out.
-AMAZING ACTION LINE: He leans in to kiss her good-night. They kiss like you would on the cheek – but it’s closer to their mouths. The door shuts – he missed his floor.
-ACTION LINE: He hangs up, feeling lame.
-ACTION LINE: She waits for him to say something more. He wants to tell her he loves her, that she should come with him.